Yeh, I've looked at it again, and I think I want to move all of the mothers introduction to a bit later in the story. Let the reader discover Xand's lie at the same as he decides to bring her in. And who said anything about Faith? I wasn't that obvious was I. Dammit! :-)

I've incorporated a bit of the second version into the first now, trying to do a switch between Father Xander to post-buffy Scooby Xander. Think it's got a way to go yet, but it's definately more on track than when I tried this the first time round (back in april I think).